Despised, rejected....

Well, I still think I'm quite a good writer, but JM clearly didn't "get on with" The Ash Grove - but at least she didn't waste too much time over it.

Find a title!

I've been worrying about the title of the first volume ever since I realised that Conscience would be the title for the second volume - and so I have been through various manifestations.  This morning, having decided that there was no single abstract noun that would describe the book without giving the game away, I tried to think of a phrase - I remembered the scene where they sing the Ash Grove together - the beginning of their liking for each other - it's a romantic song of lost love.  But there's also the sense of Ashes... death, destruction - the ash grove could be a beautiful place that's been ravaged by fire - and that does suggest what happens in some sense.  So The Ash Grove is the new title for volume 1.

Conscience: Volume 1

1.    September 1916, France

David cycled across the fields towards a horizon swollen with clouds.  Around him was the wreckage of undulating countryside, with an occasional stand of ragged trees.  Alongside the rutted track the tussocks of fading grass were still studded with late-flowering plants he recognised: scabious, fumitory, and that yellow thing – what was it called?  Rattle perhaps? And some sort of vetch, a blue-purple colour that he loved; it reminded him of one of the dresses his mother had worn when he was a child.   These few fragments of the underlying countryside remained dotted here and there across the battlefield, incongruous scraps which recalled his civilian life.  Looking up again he saw a black puff of smoke unravelling against the sky, heard the distinctive crump, and saw the group of soldiers he had noticed lounging around in the distance toppling like ninepins as a shell burst on the ground near them.  He wobbled on the bike as the vibration passed through him, and put his hand to his head to be sure he was wearing his tin hat.

David saw at once how narrowly he had missed being amongst them, a few seconds’ cycling away perhaps.  Although he was trembling slightly he felt calm. He pedalled onwards, into the disorder, hoping he could help somehow. 

Help me Lord, he prayed, help me do what you want me to here.  And thank you for keeping me safe from harm.

He knew that it was a matter of chance if another shell came or not, and he rode in amongst the wounded soldiers feeling he’d been saved for that day at least.   Some of the soldiers had dragged themselves to their feet, their uniforms spattered with clods of the dusty soil.   They looked shaken and seemed to be moving randomly about without purpose.  Others were still down: one of them lay flung near the path and David couldn’t avoid seeing his wounds.  The face was ripped away, and amidst the blood he thought he could see white bone – or was it muscle? – he couldn’t look at it for long, his stomach turned with the sight of it; he’d be no use if he started vomiting.    He had heard about shells, and how the serrated edge of a piece of metal flying through the air would slice  anything in its path.   Incredibly, the soldier was not dead.  He murmured something.  David slowly got off his bike; he wasn’t meant to be here.  He was taking a message to the dressing station.  He should leave at once, there was clearly nothing he could do, it had been a fantasy to think he could be any use here.  He clutched his bicycle fiercely, the one steady object in the midst of the confusion.

An officer staggered towards him, his face bloody with scratches, his uniform dirtied by earth thrown up by the shell.

 “You’re Medical Corps aren’t you?  Come over here – there’s one of my chaps, he – he needs looking at.”

Dear God, David thought, I can’t do this, let me go away.

But he followed the officer obediently, although he too seemed confused, as dazed with the noise and mess as David, and he’d been there in the thick of it when it happened.  David admired the fact that he was able to think of someone else.  He stopped, looked at David and gestured towards another soldier, lying in the mud, with some sort of head wound.  Nothing dramatic, very little visible, just blood trickling around his face, he looked dead.

 “Perhaps you can stitch him up” the officer said brightly “ – do something for him.  He’s a decent chap, got 3 kids.”

David looked at the officer, young of course, his pink and white complexion still unlined.  Couldn’t he see the man was dead?  He must be completely disoriented by the shell.  The noise alone had been unbearable, penetrating David, shaking his thoughts to pieces before they had a chance to form.  All he wanted to do now was run away.   

“Until last month, I was a curate in South London,” he told the officer, who was now gesturing with impatience at him.  “Now I’m just a cyclist messenger, I don’t think I can do anything for this man, he's beyond first aid.  All I can do is get a message to someone who will know what to do.”

The officer looked at him blankly – he didn’t understand – didn’t register what David was saying.   He must have been deafened by the blast.  But he must have got the gist of David's futility, barking abruptly

 “Well, what the hell are you doing here?”

“I was wondering that myself.”

David began to walk away back towards the path, recalling the injured man’s attempts to speak.  He was a non combatant, with no medical experience and this was his first morning at the front, his first exposure to fresh battle wounds and he knew he was completely out of his depth.  He felt he must go back to the man with the bloodied head, repulsive though the sight was; he was still alive at least.   

Finally...

After various delays and desperation - which is the nearest I will admit to "Writers' Block" I sat down 2 days ago and began to work on the sub-plot of the book which is currently living under the working title of Seduction - I have written about 2,000 words of new material and "I am well pleased".

It occurs to me that in Genesis when God had a look at his work and "saw that it was good" this is the story of everyone who creates something new - something different from their usual work - or just makes anything that is complete in any way, whether it's a crocheted mat or an advertising jingle.  We are so pleased to have a completed work.  Creating is what humans like to do - ergo of course God does it.  Of course God didn't have to submit his work to editors, proofreaders etc.  But perhaps that's what all geological changes and evolution are - the great refining process that has to go on in any new work.  Curiously, when I did the last (23rd?!!!) edit of TRF (during which I removed about 8,000 superflous words, mostly "quite" "somewhat" and "she wondered whether") I did not look at it and "see that it was good" - I looked at it and wondered "have I done enough? Will I ever have done enough?"    I have had so many ideas for ways of doing it differently that I am thinking of re-creating the whole thing and calling it "27 Endings" - and telling the second half entirely from His point of view.   Daring!... actually, it is going to be archived until I am famous enough for someone to take a risk on it.  I bloody well hope that writing is my real metier because I haven't got time to start a new one (except perhaps crocheting mats).

At the moment I am hoping to produce a roughish second draft of Seduction by the end of the month - and I can then submit that to the Dear Agent - who kindly said she'd like to read the whole thing when I'd finished it.   I am hoping it will be a case of 4th time lucky with her.  I am still not sure about the name:  Seduction, Frustration, A Man must Marry are 3 possibilities.  But none of these adequately describes the book - however, Deception might give the game away...but it seems possible.  Alternatively there are probably dozens of books called Deception... What's beneath... oh, I don't know.